CS™ at 7:22 AM

My completely rewritten essay. cause Karen said the previous one didn't show much significance.
Grammar checked by her too. >< haha okay lah. I shall stop moaning and thank you.
Thank you!


“Cheng Sin! Slow down! Don’t run, it’s dangerous!” My mom exclaimed as she was walking with the group. We were walking up a mountain to a place known as ‘Lot’s cave’ in Israel. Israel was the place where the Bible speaks of as ‘Gods’ chosen nation’. However, long bus travels and lousy food did not seem very ‘special’ to me at the time.

As I continued rushing forward, stepping on stone after stone, I wished that time would follow in my footsteps. The trip was to last two weeks and we were only on the third day. A Chinese saying goes ‘if you do not heed elders’ advice, you will lose out’. It was fated for me to learn it the hard way.

My quickened footsteps were hindered by a menacing hole. The tip of my foot dug into the hole and I started to lose my balance. I found myself going down, my pulse increased. I tried a balancing act but to no avail, I prepared for impact, closed my eyes and prayed that it would not hurt that bad.

My shriek of pain was followed by footsteps and shouts of concern. I scraped my knees and they were bleeding, however, I was more concerned about being embarrassed. I put up a brave front, picked myself up, and continuing walking.

‘I told you so.’ What I dreaded the most came out from my mothers’ mouth.

After much walking, we reached the top to see Lot’s cave. It was a tiny cave dug into the mountain by about 5 meters. To me it looked empty and disappointing.

The tour guide started talking about the significance of the cave. Lot was a man mentioned in the Bible. He lived in a place known as Sodom and Gomorrah.

‘God wanted to destroy the place because the people were very evil. Lot was a righteous man and God told him to leave the place with his family.’

Yet another story from the tour guide. I groaned inwardly.

‘God told Lot and his family not to look back at the city after they left or else they would be destroyed too.’

After being given instructions from my mother, the thought of God giving instructions sickened me.

‘Lot’s wife disobeyed, and when she turned back to look, she was turned into a pillar of salt.’

I felt as though the cave was instantly filled. It started to make much sense to me.

God gave instructions to Lot because he loved Lot and wanted to protect him and his family. However, when instructions are disobeyed, things can go wrong. I realized that instructions are not there to limit what we do but they are there for our own benefit.

Even though the cave was empty, it held a lot of significance for me. I myself disobeyed and was lucky not to be turned into a pillar of salt.

We started our descent down the mountain. I smiled and took my time down, this time enjoying the scenery of the farms down the mountain and the magnificent view of the Dead Sea.